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Post by Xander "X" Hayes on Jan 16, 2021 22:26:59 GMT -5
ok so it's been about 5 to 6 years since I actually did this weekly, and I quit and didn't look back, and since I'm back can someone or anyone give me some feedback on the two character rp's I did please?
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Post by Mongo the Destroyer on Jan 17, 2021 0:21:10 GMT -5
Howdy howdy and welcome! When I launched the Network I was also coming off a 6 year hiatus so I know the feeling, lol
So from the two promos I gathered...
1. X is incredibly unstable 2. X doesn’t really like WWX- or more to the point thinks he’s above it because.... 3. X has a lot of history and accolades
How my feedback lands will largely depend on where you’re planning to go with the character
So this was an interesting read. X is a rather unique character and that is always fun.
With as much as you’re harping on the lack of talent in WWX vs any of the other places X listed one would assume you’re setting up to lose right off so that X can be like “Oh, there is some talent here” and continue on. Otherwise this is just an excess of cheap heat. We get it, X has been places and done things- but now he’s older so why do any of those accolades matter when the wrestling world was clearly unaffected by his departure from regular activity?
The other thing I’m seeing is you trying to bridge the gap between genius and insanity. And it can be jarring at times. You’ll go on diatribes that show clear lucidity but then roll up on the floor giggling at a joke only X hears.
I think what kind of got me was that in the effort to establish what X is like the promos tended to feel disjointed. Like you’d start a thought then go off into a manic fit, then try to resume it. Again, this plays on X’s instability but I think you could easily pull it back a little with either less intrusions into the meat of the promo or having said tangents just be shorter. As it is, I feel like you’re going almost for Deadpool but end up with Jim Carrey’s Riddler instead.
I’m excited to see you slide back into stuff more once X actually has a real target (after being booked for a match, lol)
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Post by Xander "X" Hayes on Jan 17, 2021 16:52:48 GMT -5
Thanks. I appreciate that.
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Post by Mongo the Destroyer on Jan 17, 2021 20:25:19 GMT -5
No worries man! It’s tough sometimes to gauge how stuff’ll go over. I’m running a storyline right now that I’m pretty sure is only fun for me, lol
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Post by Xander "X" Hayes on Jan 17, 2021 21:07:01 GMT -5
Lol, I write just to write x is a tweener so he tends to flip the script depending on who he faces. I want just to help mamba right now get this going. So writing for me will be just giggles and zany antics. I want people to either laugh their butts off at the rps and have fun.
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